Help With This Song

[wyotryot]

About a year ago, or so, JS user Cloe posted a tune under the topic "Help with this song". Well, I fiddled with it a bit, and may have replied, I don't remember now. But the song stuck with me and I fiddled some more, and kept coming back to it, and eventually this little story came out, of a singer and her groupie. Cloe Cloe wherever you are! I hope you like it.

http://www.box.net/shared/b84cossh0xjsdnvj3a4u

HELP WITH THIS SONG

she was a singer
rasping on her last vocal chord
he was a loser swaying in the front row
for no other reason than he was feeling bored
she looked down to him
lips moving but no song being sung
she sat on the edge of the stage
pulled his eager face to her lips she screamed

I need I need I need some help with this song
it’s going wrong
oh please oh please oh please help me with this song
I won’t last long

he was enchanted
here was his enamoratatata
They went off to live together he no longer loser
filled to bursting with bravadadada
he wrote her lyrics
wrapped her in aeolian scalar flow
she always cried at the end of the day
tears dripping on his puzzled face pulled his ear to her lips she screamed

I need I need I need some help with this song
it’s going wrong
oh please oh please oh please help me with this song
I won’t last long

[RobertLeeHall]

great dynamics. cool guitar. 

Way to belt out that great performance

Robert.

[jkenney]

Hey Wyo very cool sound. I really like the guitar sound on this. Thanks for sharing

[wyotryot]

Thanks, Robert. Making that harmony was particularly fun, especially as it's 4-part, and only 2 of the parts were original.

Thanks, Joe! The guitars were all jamstudio, except for the lead line; that was a mixcraft loop called bazouki1, that I mutated with FX. All in all, a very fun tune to do, inspired by Cloe's original, which I wish I had kept, but I unfortunately overwrote it.

[wyotryot]

I found Cloe's original tune.

http://www.jamstudio.com/Studio/FWSongShare.asp?SongNum=537150&SongId=537337

[Dave H]

Excellent Wy !......the mix is fantastic ! ......great vocals too.......I hope Cloe gets to hear this, she will love it......

Dave

[wyotryot]

Thanks, Dave! 5 up? Awesome!

[Dave H]

Yep !.... 5 's......Oh, and a Standing Ovation too !.............

http://youtu.be/OqMhU64HMUA

Dave

[hatchetrocker]

Not too shabby. Nice use of effects. 

[wyotryot]

Thanks, Hatch! And nice to see you around again

[hatchetrocker]

Thanks Wyatt. It's good to have some time to be back.

[Omega]

wow wyo another goodie great track , love the emotion and feeling in your vocals bud great song

[wyotryot]

Thanks, Omega!

[Cloe(:]

wowowowowow. I absolutely love it! You know what the ironic thing is "Help with this song" was actually just the post inquiring for someone to actually help me with the song itself, it wasn't really suppose to be the song title.  but its awesome, i love it! the extra guitars make it sound even better. (: Thank you wyot for once again making my music amazing.