Vocals & Music Needed - Please Help

[Simple Voice]

If anybody is interested or has the time, I have some more lyrics that need a tune and vocals. I'm thinking.. kinda more punk style (think Avril Lavigne type) and a girl for vocals, maybe a guy for the background parts.... I really really want to hear this song in action, I guess you could say. I could really use the help, please.

Well, here are the lyrics...

(Verse 1) Gotta keep my feelings bottled in, {so numb}
can't let them show.
Gotta put on a smile, {so cold}
so no one knows.

(Chorus) You ask if everything's okay,
I just smile and turn away,
{trying to hide the tears}
'cause you can't see
the broken part of me.

(Verse 2) Blocking out the world, {so numb}
hiding within the light,
'cause monsters lurk in the dark, {so cold}
they're hiding within the night.

(Chorus) They say everything's okay,
but all I ever wanna do is run away,
{trying to hide the fears}
'cause they won't see
the broken part of me.

(Verse 3) Pushed and pulled every other way, {so numb}
I'm just giving in to get out.
Surrounded by a see of faces, {so cold}
tell me what it's all about.

(Chorus) Tell me everything's okay,
or maybe I'll just fade away,
{trying to hide from the stares}
oh, won't you please see
the broken part of me.

(Bridge) Life's a roller coaster ride every day,
when everything's going the wrong way.

(Verse 4) Left with no bridges to burn, {so numb}
spun around and around,
carried on waves of pain, {so cold}
I'm left broken on the ground.

(Chorus) Can't believe everything's okay,
'cause I'm falling away,
{hoping somebody hears}
but they'll never see
the broken part of me... [fades away]

© Kaitlin Storm

{ } means background...... [ ] is what the lyrics do...

[Crystal]

I will see what I can do with this. I like the lyrics...

[Simple Voice]

Thank you let me know if and when you come up with anything.

[Crystal]

I have an instrumental track built for this...it's posted under show us your stuff section, I built it myself using mixcraft and some of their loops. It's not really avril lavign sounding but it's what I came up with. I'm building a melody line around it as well. Easier said than done however, and it's taking me a while to figure out which way I want to go with the lyrics and melody line. Hopefully in a day or two I should be able to post something so you can see what I have and see if you like it or not.

[Crystal]

Here's what I have so far.

Let me know what you think.

http://www.box.net/s/lu7yx12pxn4f1s38ogsb

[Simple Voice]

I like it, but I think the vocals are kind of a bit over powered by the music, they're kind of hard to hear. I think it might sound a bit better at a lower pitch as well with maybe a bit more edge?